tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8868883626672897364.post5703531879095151631..comments2024-03-15T09:02:03.411-07:00Comments on Midlist Writer: No Man's Land blurb Version 2.0--Feedback Welcome!Sean McLachlanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09778503397743759469noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8868883626672897364.post-56341406325515785132015-12-07T21:00:14.001-08:002015-12-07T21:00:14.001-08:00Sean--I love the phrase "hellscape of shell c...Sean--I love the phrase "hellscape of shell craters" and the "Until now."<br /><br />Would you consider eliminating the phrase "where any mistake can be fatal" and instead introduce the concept of fatal mistakes at the very end. Maybe something like "Now, any mistake could be fatal..."<br /><br />Good luck! You're so prolific--I'm envious.Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8868883626672897364.post-9030610666419985512015-12-07T11:09:46.119-08:002015-12-07T11:09:46.119-08:00Much tighter!Much tighter!Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.com