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Saturday, 25 January 2014

Tinkering with Radio Hope's blurb (version 3.0)

I realized that the blurb for my upcoming novel Radio Hope doesn't actually mention the radio station! So I've added a line. Tell me if you think this flows. One of the things I love about indie publishing is just a week before a book is published, you can fiddle with it.

In a world shattered by war, pollution and disease. . .
A gunslinging mother longs to find a safe refuge for her son.
A frustrated revolutionary delivers water to villagers living on a toxic waste dump.
In humanity’s last city, the assistant mayor hopes he will never have to take command.
Their only thing in common is they all listen to Radio Hope, a mysterious station that broadcasts vital information on surviving in a blighted world. But when a mad prophet and his army of fanatics march out of the wildlands on a crusade to purify the world through blood and fire, all three will find their lives intertwining, and changing forever.
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4 comments:

  1. Rusty Carl25 January 2014 at 07:36

    I'm the worst person in the world about this sort of stuff (a glance at my own blurbs confirms this), but I think that it's fine.

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  2. D.G. Hudson25 January 2014 at 08:01

    See my comment on Civil War blog. I will email you later today re the interview.

    I just had a little tweak suggestion.

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  3. Alex J. Cavanaugh25 January 2014 at 08:16

    You're right - it needed the radio station in it.
    I think it would read smoother if it said 'The only thing...' Or maybe, 'What ties them together is Radio Hope...' Yeah, the last one has more impact with less words.

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  4. Sioux Roslawski25 January 2014 at 15:16

    I like Alex's suggestion: "What ties them together..."

    Good thing you caught that omission before it went out.

    Good luck and congratulations.

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