Thursday, 27 August 2015

Blurb help please!

I'm getting ready to publish We Had Flags, Book 3 in my Toxic World post-apocalyptic series. It will be out in mid-September. Right now I'm fiddling with the blurb, always a tricky part of any project, and I could use some help. The blurb is below. Any thoughts? Thanks!

A law doesn't work if everyone breaks it.
For forty years, New City has been a bastion of order in a fallen world. One crucial law has maintained peace--it is illegal to place Blame for the collapse of civilization. Anyone found guilty of Blame is branded and stripped of citizenship.
But when some unwelcome visitors arrive from across the sea, old wounds break open and no one is safe from Blame.


Tim S said...

It works for me. It's a small amount of explanation and a broad brush strokes overview of the plot. Intriguing and interesting. Of course I'd have been buying the book if all it said in the Blurb was "Book 3"...!

D.G. Hudson said...

Hi Sean, I would place the law BLAME quote right next to the first line. It would give that first line more strength. So rearrange that line and the line about Forty years. . .next to the line about visitors. That's my 2 Canadian cents worth, and we don't even use pennies anymore. . .Good luck with the Blurb!

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